I edited proposals for a scientist with a hearing impairment. It was a meticulous task as grammar, punctuation, syntax and meaning were often ambiguous. I also explained all editing changes to the scientist and provided instruction to help him become for proficient in his writing.
The following is an excerpt from a technical report submitted to me for editing. Asterisks have been added to protect privacy.
After Edit
The * proposals have been planned as part of the * . The * accepted these proposals in September *. Accordingly, the * Park Trail will be used for off highway vehicles less than 50 inches wide. * selected the proposal to improve a trail section by “placing barrier rock to keep [all terrain vehicles] (ATVs) on the trail and mitigating damage in wet areas of the trail” (, page *). Following proposal # *, work to begin the trail realignment would begin *.
Proposed Action
Due to wet soil conditions and constant water on trail # ***, all terrain vehicle use has resulted in deep ruts, braiding and mud bogs. To mitigate this problem a 2.3 mile reroute has been planned. Following protocol, the reroute will follow “best management procedures” by constructing a new trail in an area where soils are better suited for motorized use.
Once resource specialists select the trail section realignment site, the trail section will be constructed in summer *. As set forth in proposal # *, the water-damaged trail section, located parallel to the * Reservoir, will then be permanently closed and rehabilitated with native dirt, seedlings (willows), and rocks to restore the wet shore as deemed satisfactory. The rehabilitation of the former trail will begin late summer and early fall, when most of the shore and surrounding meadows become dry, making the work easier. A new bridge will be constructed in the lower spillway reach, adjoining the intermittent stream below the reservoir.
Before Edit
The **proposals were planned as part of the * . The * accepted these proposals in September *. * Park Trail will still be in use is still to be used for OHV less than 50 inches wide. The * selected these proposals to plan the trail section mitigation by “placing the barrier rock to keep ATVs on the trail and mitigating damage in wet areas of the trail” (*, page *). Therefore, this proposal, # *, would begin the planning of the trail section realignment starting in *. Under the planning, the Progress will be considered further in the analysis for the proposed trail reroute alignment.
Proposed Action
*trail # *, which is this part of the *ATV Trail, runs adjacent the *, The Wet soil conditions and constant water on the trail has resulted in deep ruts, braiding, and mud bogs. To avoid this problem, a selected reroute is planned in the *. This trail reroute proposal will follow Best Management Procedures to mitigate the trail where soils or sites are better suited for motorized use. Proposal # * submitted to *, is a 2.3 mile a reroute of the * Trail #*, where it parallels * Park Reservoir. Once all the resource specialists submit the best trail section realignment site, the trail section will be constructed as planned in summer *. The Proposal # * would then close the damaged trail section adjacent to the reservoir. This The old trail section of the * Trail will be rehabilitated with native dirt, seedlings (willows), and rocks to restore the wet shore as deemed satisfactory. Timing of the Rehabilitation of on the old trail would start late summer and early fall, because when most of the shore and surrounding meadows become dry, making the work easier. A new bridge will be constructed in the lower spillway reach and adjoining intermittent stream below the reservoir.